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Tuesday, 6 November 2012

The Big Day

WALT: write a story in sequence.

The massive day had arrived, for John to jump 40 kilometers from outer space. He felt so frightened.


When John entered the control room all you could hear was a big boom.  Mission control  told John to put on his suit so that his blood doesn’t boil when he lands on earth. John was praying that he will have a safe and successful landing, and prayed that he doesn’t come zooming down from space dead. After he said his prayer he entered the capsule. The people in the control told him that he will be leaving in five minutes.   


It was time for John to do the scariest thing in his whole life. The countdown had started, 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1 and boom, fire went blasting out of the capsule like the a cheetah at full speed. Then all of a sudden, he saw this amazing thing from space. He was waiting for Mission control to tell him to jump. Mission control said to John “Are you ready?”. “Yes” said John. They said jump, so he did. He went diving down through space like a jet out of control. Something went wrong and he could feel it. The parachute had not opened. He tried and tried but it still didn’t open.


John looked at his parachute but the parachute wasn’t working because it was jammed onto the handle. John unjammed the parachute He pulled it and finally it worked. He was coming down very slowly. It took him a few minutes but he landed safely and didn’t come back dead. When he was on ground he cried tears of joy.


When John came back to the Mission control room there was a big surprise and everyone was going completely nuts. John will remember this moment for the rest of his life. The End


Theme: Wherever you go and the equipment your take make sure it
works perfectly.

1 comments:

Anonymous said...

Your story is very interesting. I like the description words you used. I like your theme, it's unique. How would you react if you were John?

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